CIEL paragrph

here is my draft on the critique section. i tried to write it as if someone were going to read it. tell me what you think....

As upper division contract students we work independently, without the structure of a program or class, so as we started the group one of the main focuses was to gain feedback from our peers and the arts community. To accommodate this we established a critique schedule in which we could display our work to each other, our own faculty sponsor, and occasionally other arts professors that were not as familiar with our own work. Since each person came from a different background, and a different medium, these critiques were extremely unique with a variety of input. How does a photographer critique a sculpture or a ceramicist view a painting? It was both challenging and enlightening to so regularly consider another’s medium. The artist always had a choice on how his or her critique was run leaving it up to the artist to ask for feedback on particular questions or concerns.
Critique became a time to reflect. We began to draw connections not only between our own work, but also in the books that we were reading. Strangely enough many of the artists seemed to have an epiphany with the works On Longing by Susan Stewart and Poetics of Space by Gaston Bachelard. This running dialog between critique, reading and seminar eventually carried itself right into our end of the quarter show.